MbShea@PWP@English@UMCP

Abstract: There has been controversy over the merits of music education, especially for the younger children. Some claim that music education isn’t necessary, or should have funding reduced, since learning music may not increase intelligence or provide cognitive benefits. In addition, research into the benefits of a musical background produces mixed results; sometimes, researchers conclude that there are no long-term effects to learning music and that increases in academic ability could be due to other factors. However, this doesn’t mean that music education doesn’t have any benefits. Despite contrary research, having a musical background can improve reading skills and memory, reduce difficulties in learning a second language, and change brain plasticity. Furthermore, music doesn’t only have the potential to better executive function; music also provides some non-cognitive benefits. Music can help facilitate prosocial skills, and influence emotion regulation. It can improve a person’s quality of life by boosting mental health, providing a sense of belonging and purpose, and encouraging self-achievement and self-esteem. In the end, music education is important, not only for any cognitive benefits it may provide, but also for its health and social benefits.
WC = 185 words

Reader's profile: I imagine a parent who is skeptical of the benefits music education can provide. After all, conflicting evidence about whether or not music can improve intelligence and provide long-term benefits would make parents unsure of what music can do for their children.

Reader's response: Well, if there's truly no cognitive benefits in the end (even this is a toss-up, as some evidence shows that music can provide some benefits), music is important since it provides other benefits. My child could learn better social skills, since usually music education within schools doesn't happen in a solitary space, and even find a way to express himself. Also, he might feel very fulfilled learning something on his own and making new friends. So, maybe I should get my child involved in music; it's not like it would hurt him or anything, and it might teach him to cooperate with others...It would be nice if there were truly some cognitive benefits though, but I'll take what I can get. But couldn't sports provide the same social and health benefits? I think I need to research more into this topic.

Revised thesis/problem statement: Parents are not quite clear on what the benefits of having a music education are. This article aims to clarify any cognitive benefits a music education could provide as well as any non-cognitive benefits there may be so that parents can make a more informed choice for their children.

Voice: For the first section, as I talk about my personal connection to music, I will write in 1st person. However, for the rest of the document, I will write in 3rd person since I'll be explaining research results and not my own opinion. Perhaps towards the end, I may include comments about music from other people; then, I will switch back to 1st person.

Citation: The citation will be informal and will be the same throughout; since the audience will not be too technical (they will be parents or teachers who want to convince others of the merits of music education), informal citing will allow them to know where the sources came from and will give a more casual feel to the document.

Good plan, J.

One last thought: any down sides? As in letting a child choose an instrument or shift? Too much practice? Injuries? That is one way to conclude, to close with brief discussion on how to avoid problems.