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Oops, science is POWERFUL!
ENGL 390, 390H, and (sometimes) 398V Class Journal
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Week 8: toward break and round 2 of coffee cup memo
First, a little tweet of science visualization in yarn->>
I’ve finally finished my year-long project of a temperature blanket. Each day recorded in colour coded yarn dependant on the average temperature that day. No idea what I will do with it now, it’s ridiculously long! pic.twitter.com/QvV9uN57EX
— Fiona Lawson 💙 (@FionaLawsonNHS) March 11, 2023
Now, some details I see from your work in round 1. First, some new and specific source/citation details. The ONLY paragraph you absolutely need formal citation is the EVALUATION NODE PARAGRAPH No. 6) where you summarize some key findings from either:
- Charles Moore for Team Paper (use the library databases to find a co-authored peer reviewed article form the marine biology discipline); OR
- Martin Hocking for Team Styro (use the library databases to find one of his two peer reviewed article from the field of environmental technology)
Here is some connecting, aka transition language to help you move from the pivot paragraph (no. 5) that defines LCA from the authoritative EPA source I gave you last week:
Moore's work on the fate of ocean plastic is, essentially, a both a definition and quantification of the "grae" portion of plastic disposal (including Styrofoam).
Hocking's work, though seemingly dated, covers the entire life cycle of both paper and Styrofoam cups, making his work an LCA even though this method was not articulated until the 2000s
How do you cite EPA in paragraph 5? You have two choices. One is to use a referral link and paraphrase. The other is to use a block quote, which will require both a referral link and a formal citation.
I have mentioned how important transitions are. Let's look at brief Google document on transitions, taken from a real-world setting. We will be looking at tight transitions and loose transitions.
Primary question from the Eli Review work concerned the other really hard paragraph (the hardest paragraph is Para 6, the node paragraph where you summarize some research from your primary "vetting" scientist). This is Para 4, also a node paragraph. Here are your referral link sources to use here.
- For Moore and Team Paper, use one of his Captain Moore website pages (or the YouTube video linked earlier) for a summary.
- For Hocking and Team Paper, use the policymakers' summary PDF from the Intergovernmental Panel on Climate Change (IPCC (most recent report (2022).
CAUTION: the IPCC pdf is huge. Keep this in mind with your curation.
Note: both climate change and ocean plastic are common knowledge domains at the level of detail we are using here.
Hint: both of these paragraphs need the logos of detail. In each case be sore to capture some quantity about these problems. Examples:
How large are the garbage patches and how many are there?
What is the temperature uptick we have locked in, thus far, and what are we trying to limit too?
In Hockings' analysis, how much more energy is required for paper cups? (PEER REVIEWED)
In Moore's analysis, what are some of the specific effects like numbers of sea life harmed, damage to the food chain, etc. (PEER REVIEWED).
Watch for Wednesday. Will help us with how the problems are linked and this analysis is flawed but useful.
Marybeth Shea
Happy Wednesday. Let's spend time together with a dummy text document to help you prep for Friday's draft two post before spring break opens up wide and swallows us all. In a good way. Your Writing Task is UP now. See the ELMS calendar, too.
What does the memo have to do with the Herman Daly video of Monday, TBD in class. We will return to this idea -- and critique the memo -- after spring break. This work will show modifications or freedom-from-the-arrangement you may wish to use.
Here is a link to a Google doc with dummy text approach (fixed) to the coffee cup memo. I use commentary to guide you.
Craft lesson: using first, second, person voice to create a tone in your documents: warm or cool. Think of this quality as a temperature gradient. On twitter yesterday, I found this tweet, which forms an object lesson.P7 Restate recommendation; evaluation to policy BUT NOTE LIMITATIONS.
MICU Nurse:
— WesElyMD (@WesElyMD) March 14, 2023
“WE are weaning off pressors. We’re awake & following commands. Yep, WE’Re ready for extubation from the vent.”
I’ve grown to love it when #nurses join in patients’ journeys so much that they use “we this” & “we that” in their presentation.
They are fully invested! pic.twitter.com/PrhcjHthvR
P7 Restate recommendation; evaluation to policy BUT NOTE LIMITATIONS.Where are you using first and third person -- perhaps second person (aka first person plural) in your memo?s
Marybeth Shea
Happy Friday and welcome to spring break.
9-12 same Google Meet link
Here is St. P's day in one of my "old sod" places, in Wexford.
And, some form 2017 in typical weather from the Beara Pennisula in Cork, sorta. People fight over which county the Beara Pennisula is in.
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Week 7: coffee cup recommendation
Start by looking at Friday's post last week. I gave you audio links to consider broadly two linked problems within the coffee cup question (stasis 1=conjecture).
This NEW memo content is more complex and wide-ranging.
- CRAFT ELEMENT: Transitions BETWEEN PARAGRAPHS are a way to thread the cognition for our busy readers.
- COGNITIVE FRAME: Your first memo focused on the definition stasis (second stasis, with the rhetorical move of elaborated definition), with a evaluation move at the end. Now, we focus more on evaluation work between the two cup choices -- paper or plastic --, which is the fourth stasis. And, the policy stasis (number 5) is really the overarching job of the memo.
Below is a visual that will help you see the memo movement, quickly and concisely, toward the end goal.
This is your roadmap visual!
Marybeth Shea
Let's begin with a document resource from a few semesters ago. This is an OHitS/AMA type of resource. FIRST, you will see that I captured "free" sentences and paragraphs for you to use. The second part is a Q&A that will help you think through this complexity.
Do not forget that you post your approximately 60% arrangment+content Friday night on Eli Review
CRAFT FOCUS: Paragraphs! Sentences live in paragraphs. Please keep your sentence strategies in place and consider NOT using empty subjects. Remember the cognitive wedge? You can apply that thinking at the beginning of each paragraph (also, simutaneously balancing the topic sentence value with a sense of transition from the earlier paragraph).
Generally, short paragraphs are evidence that you, the writer, does the heavy lifting for the reader. Why? Please consider paragraphing as an ethical duty to your reader. At the very least, think about manners and consideration. The two handouts here about paragraphs you have seen before.
(Those two handouts linked just above are MS Word short docs to help you review paragraph essentials.)
GENERAL CRAFT RESOURCE: Grammar/Punctuation/Conventions advice
Check out this set of links (on the navigation bar to right but linked for your ease). What skill are you weak on? Semi-colons v colons? Using that v. which? Take a lock.
Linked there are my short memes (I made them) on common points, so that you might be able to remember them better (COGNITIVE strategy: visual plus humor).
To my parents, Ayn Rand and God.
To my parents, J.K. Rowling and God.
To my parents, Stephen Colbert and Jon Stewart.
OR
In a newspaper account of a documentary about Merle Haggard:
Among those interviewed were his two ex-wives, Kris Kristofferson and Robert Duvall.
These two preceding examples are from Theresa Hayden. Here is another doosie that cries out for a serial or Oxford comma.
Here is another doosie that cries out for a serial or Oxford comma, by TH and presented in Wikipedia>
The Times once published an unintentionally humorous description of a Peter Ustinov documentary, noting that
"highlights of his global tour include encounters with Nelson Mandela, an 800-year-old demigod and a dildo collector."
Now, to be clear, the serial comma does not always solve ambiguity problems (classic teaching example):
They went to Oregon with Betty, a maid and a cook –
- They went to Oregon with Betty, who was a maid and a cook. (One person)
- They went to Oregon with Betty, both a maid and a cook. (One person)
- They went to Oregon with Betty, a maid and cook. (One person)
- They went to Oregon with Betty (a maid) and a cook. (Two people)
- They went to Oregon with Betty, a maid, and with a cook. (Two people)
- They went to Oregon with Betty – a maid – and a cook. (Two people)
- They went to Oregon with the maid Betty and a cook. (Two people)
- They went to Oregon with a cook and Betty, a maid. (Two people)
- They went to Oregon with Betty as well as a maid and a cook. (Three people)
- They went to Oregon with Betty and a maid and a cook. (Three people)
- They went to Oregon with Betty, one maid and a cook. (Three people)
- They went to Oregon with a maid, a cook, and Betty. (Three people)
We can also look at the grocery list problem:
buying bread, jam, coffee, cream, juice, eggs, and bacon. VS
eating toast and jam, coffee and cream, juice, and bacon and eggs
Finally, we have a theme song to remember this punctuation convention.
And, this from S.C, one of my heroes.
http://www.cc.com/video-clips/fo5d9i/the-colbert-report-vampire-weekend
Marybeth Shea
Happy rainy (garden) Friday. Many of you are worried about tonight's post. PLEASE get in there however imperfect or incomplete your work is. Remember that you do not know what you know until you commit tenetiely to writing the ideas down.
Then, you can improve your work/ideas by the essential practice of giving and receiving feedback. Be on time for this and late if needed for me.
As per ususal, I am available 9-2 at same Google Meet link.
New paragraph help: Life Cycle Assessment (Analysis). Learn quickly what this environmental technique is. This EPA source is helpful and authoritative. Then, you craft a short definition paragraph that helps you pivot from the description work of the first part of the memo, to analysis. Here is a way to approach that (free ideas+text)-->
Shifting now toward analysis based on my [name climate change or the fate of ocean plastic] frame, we can use the environmental technique of life cycle assessment (LCA). The EPA defines LCA as.....
You can do a short direct quote OR you can paraphrase.
Having defined LCA, we can turn now to the peer reviewed work of [name either Moore or Hocking}...
THIS IS THE PIVOT TO YOUR EVAL Paragraph SUMMARIZING RESEARCH FINDINGS,
which is for next week.
Week 6! Finishing the rain garden memo; on to coffee cup memo
Let's start with a student question or two-->
When do we do specific citations? I know you said that in some paragraphs, you wanted us to specifically say "according to x, rain gardens..." but I wasn't sure where I had to do this instead of doing intext citations (like the author, year)
I am trying to teach two types of citation: 1) formal, which you know primarily as APA style for formal science writing; and 2) informal but POWERFUL citation that helps readers especially in less formal settings.
“According to” is a signal phrase that can be used in both types of settings but is very important -- read essential -- in informal citation.
SAMPLE of signal phrase with information citation using curated referral link: (from the illustrating para)
Rain gardens have two components, to perform their pollution and water/erosion control functions: below ground structure and above ground structure, where the plants are. According to the helpful design manual from the Low Impact Development Center, Lorem ipsum dolor sit amet, consectetur adipiscing elit. Cras lacinia placerat rutrum. Integer et commodo dolor, condimentum suscipit massa. Suspendisse vel quam elit. Donec nec facilisis nunc. Duis congue consequat orci, vel pharetra nibh efficitur vitae. Aliquam ornare cursus commodo. Donec ac nulla venenatis, bibendum urna sed, congue risus. Nulla ut orci velit. Praesent lectus lacus, rutrum at dapibus quis, vestibulum in erat. Nulla pharetra congue placerat. Nulla convallis, mauris non finibus fringilla, erat felis mollis ipsum, ut gravida ex mauris quis ligula. Suspendisse a ex vel justo euismod congue id nec augue. Aenean pulvinar dictum neque. Proin nec nibh ac enim accumsan volutpat. You can access this guide here, which will show you both the soil and living materials needed.
I wasn't sure what to write for Davis and Larry coffman paragraphs; I know that we don't specifically need a paragraph dedicated to Larry but I wasn't sure how you wanted us to incorporate it. Also, for the Davis paragraph, should I just talk about one of his research that shows the benefits of rain gardens?
The “Davis para” is the evidence para where you make a claim, which is supported by science. We need to rely on more formal sort of citation as in the APA or author date citation. Therefore, find a peer-reviewed article by Allen Davis that you can mention. We are not just linking to such an article because Jane is on a small device and tight timeline. She only needs to be able to function in this meeting. YET! You need to signal how powerful (per reviewed) this evidence is. So, see this link with an abstract; you can gather some evidence and paraphrase this in this evaluation paragraph. You can write something like:
...In one peer reviewed article, Davis and colleagues note these findings about rain garden effectivenes slacinia placerat rutrum. Integer et commodo dolor, condimentum suscipit massa. Suspendisse vel quam elit. Donec nec facilisis nunc. Duis congue consequat orci, vel pharetra nibh efficitur vitae (Chi‐hsu Hsieh, 2007). Aliquam ornare cursus commodo. Donec ac nulla venenatis, bibendum urna sed, congue risus. Nulla ut orci velit. Praesent lectus lacus, rutrum at dapi........
Cited: (at the end of the memo!)
C Hsieh, AP Davis, BA Needelman (2007). “Nitrogen removal from urban stormwater runoff through layered bioretention columns.” in Water Environment Research.
New info: CHOICES!
- flip P2 and P3, classifying and illustration paras. Hint: which one is longer? Make that the para in the P3 positions to honor the cognitive wedge strategy.
- Use signal phrases in P4 the evaluation paragraph to underscore that signal phases prepaer the reader to wake up to a source!
- Is your P2 or P3 paragraphs two long? You could break into two sub paragraphs. For example, in the illustrating paragraph, you could pivot between the abiotic and biotic portions.
- CHOICE: biotic or abiotic portion can be first or second in the illustrating paragraph
- Other choices you might have? What do you think?
BOOKENDING: Signal phrase PLUS a phase later that encompasses the information signaled above. Let's scroll back to my paragraph example. I bolded the phrases so you can see the bookending.
Question! Is this a craft lesson or a cognitive lesson?
POWER OF LOGOS and THREE: make sure you include three numerical findings that quantify the value of rain gardnens -- TBD.
Focus on courtesy in peer ccollaboration, including discussion of the problem of microaggressions. Let's start with this padlet link (curated HTLM exhibits by Mb).
Exit music here, from Sesame Street.
Marybeth Shea
Wednesday! Here is the entire padlet (html platform for arranging links) where in the second half of the class, we will view a 20 minute video on microagressions. Cognitive note re a stasis theory frame: the video opens with a definition of microaggressions and further subdivides the larger definition into three sub categories. This is a powerful and oft-needed definition strategy, namely, to divide into parts.
Today, I answer questions about where YOU are in the first memo, now that we have two peer revision sessions in Eli Review (about 6-7 minutes).
Also, as requested by Y, we WILL have a Thursday night -- 8PM-9PM -- Office Hourss in the Sky (OHitS/AMA) session. Here is a sample from previous class year.
Here are a few ideas that I talk about briefly before we look at the 20 minute video in the padlet. I divide into microscope view and telescope view. More on that in class. Of course, this is a pair of metaphors to focus on a cognitive and moral strategy about how writers view readers.
Microscope: audience analysis, usability testing, focus group, interview, document testing...🔬
Telescope: ethical behavior, community awareness, team approach, respect for others/all, compassion, moral beauty...🔭
And, this is a NASA hero, Henning Liedecker-------->
Marybeth Shea
Happy Friday. See you between 9-12 at same Google Meet. Remember that in the last ten minutes of each hour, I might be taking small dog out for a quick walk.
Watch your calendar function for the Eli Review prompt for the Assignment 1 long term parking lot for the rain garden memo grade.
Next week you will need to recommend -- with reciepts and very quickly -- to Jane the disposable hot beverage cup that is better for the environment. To prepare, I want you to think about which frame you will use:
- climate change and one partial-yet-huge strategy of energy conservation
- fate of ocean plastic and the emerging science of utter seriousness concerning global food chains and human health effects (biomagnification is one action area)
Listen to this podcast for background on climate change -->
Now, consider the frame of the fate of ocean plastic with this TED resource-->
Preview of next week where I repeat the pattern of
- what each paragraph DOES in the short recommendation memo
- what sentence starters -- NEW! plus transitions -- to move you the writer and your reader through the complexity.
Audience/Context/Purpose: This NEW memo content is more complex and wide-ranging. Transitions (craft lesson) are a way to thread the cognition (achienve flow for the readers, which is a cogntive event) for our busy readers. Your first memo focused on the definition stasis, with a evaluation move at the end.
Now, our boss wants a problem-solution memo about the type of coffee cup we use in our firm. Therefore, we need to frame this work with the stasis of policy (what ought we do).
Back to our boss: Jane wants a coffee cup policy for the office that is "green." Also, the new MD Governor wants her advice, too OK, that is the context for your invention.
Here is rough working arrangement (paragraphs):
POLITE OPENING, with your recommendation that previews your final policy paragraph
CONJECTURE PARAGRAPH Problem description (our office situation, with quantifiers), with reference to national. international size of the problem
CONTEXT PARA(s) Environmental problems (energy efficiency ->climate change AND persistence of plastic in ocean -> food chain disruption)
YOUR WEIGHTED PROBLEM SOLVING METHOD (revealing your pre-analytical frame or bias)
DEFINITION-->CAUSE/EFFECT information
Coffee cup types (how many? Can we do this in one paragraph or do we need one per coffee cup type? Use counting technique of two or three)
PIVOT PARA from backgrount to ANALYSIS PARAS
Decision criteria (HINT: Life cycle analysis, and define this; use an EPA source) HERE, this definition helps us move to the VALUE paragraphs
CAUSE/EFFECT continued (system) -->VALUE (Harm or benefit)
Martin Hocking's work on life cycle analysis of paper v. Styrofoam OR
Charles Moore's work on size of ocean garbage patches
POLICY/ RECOMMENDATION (restate your recommendation, with qualifiers, as one does in science land)
Science/Research support (remind about evidence discussed above in VALUING PARAGRAPHS)
Qualification (concede reasonableness of the other position)
Sentences that can help you as topic sentences or transitions sentences between paragraphs
Any analysis of coffee cup choice requires use of life cycle analysis.
Life cycle analysis -- also known as cradle-to-grave -- helps capture the entire environmental effect from origin and inputs through use and, importantly, to disposal.
In my analysis, I weight [name environmental problem] more heavily than [the other problem].
Life cycle analysis can help us understand this difficult question about coffee cup sustainability
We have two choices in coffee cups: paper or plastic (Styrofoam).
Martin Hocking conducted the first -- and to date only -- peer-reviewed analysis of the energy embodied in coffee cup choices.
Charles Moore is among the first to alert us to the huge problem of persistent ocean plastic.
We will work through the above next week, using stasis theory.
Week 5: rain garden memo refinement
Hello! Do not forget that tonight is the due date for YOUR responses to what your peer partners posted in the first task in Eli Review. Questions? We will chat briefly in class based on what you wish to ask. I think that you are all wondering about how chunk details into which paragraph, rignt?
One of Aristotle's canons for writing is ARRANGEMENT (of paragraphs, chapters, sections, etc.). The order and "chunking" of information matters very much for reader cognition and receptivity to what you write. This care in arranging information for the audience is also part of the cognitive wedge strategy. Another way to think about this is the given-new contract to help ensure clarity and coherence for readers. Look at this discussion on Given-New. (read three pages of this). Read for Wednesday. Now on to the citation style I spoke about. We are using natural language style aka sentencing citation aka journalism style. We attribute by using signal phrases and curated links. Hypertext is our friend!
Introducing a key phrase for referral links is a way to cite:
According to .....
Other positions? Do you remember the embellishement discussion in a sentence handout earlier?
Cupcake ipsum dolor sit amet -- according to Rachel Ray -- gummi bears donut liquorice. Pie sugar plum fruitcake donut marshmallow halvah lollipop cheesecake. Pastry danish chocolate cupcake pie muffin carrot cake oat cake.
Cupcake ipsum dolor sit amet gummi bears donut liquorice. Pie sugar plum fruitcake donut marshmallow halvah lollipop cheesecake, according to Rachel Ray. Pastry danish chocolate cupcake pie muffin carrot cake oat cake.
Other signal phrases to anchor what you write into sound sources that you link with curation
You can find this rain garden construction information here in a short web exhibit hosted by the University of Maryland rain garden guide.
In a recent study, Davis found that. . .
Numerous studies by Davis and others affirm. . .
This design guide includes. . .
YOUR WORKING STRUCTURE:
Polite first-person opening.
P1 -- NO CITATION NEEDED as is simple common knowledge of a well established technology
P2 -- You can build your ethos by including references in natural language to help your reader trust you as well as find additional sources that the reader chooses:
Marybeth noted that both Prince Georges' County and the University of Maryland played key originating roles in developing this technology, as well as evaluation this technology. As you know, she is a trained botanist.
The Wikipedia "rain garden" entry is quite good, however, the "history" section misattributes the inventor to Dick Brinker. Actually, according to a conversation with Marybeth, Larry Coffman......
P3 -- for details on plants and soil layers USE THE first PDF guide and/or the P.G County Bioretention Manual, but curate the links as in P2 and other other examples I gave. Readers hate to be sent to large PDF w/o warning.
P4 -- Use a formal citation style for the engineering curriculum material as Davis is a co-author. Recall here that you are using a short, open access standing for a paywalled peer review piece by Davis. Our boss cannot find/access on her smart phone under this meeting deadline.
Gathering of sources discussed thus far:
- visit the Low Impact Development Center
- Prince George's County. 1993. Design Manual for Use of Bioretention in Stormwater Management. Prince George's County, MD Department of Environmental Protection. Watershed Protection Branch, Landover, MD. See this digital version->
- Bioretention Manual (Report). Landover, MD: Prince George's County, Department of Environmental Resources. 2002. Archived from the original on 2009-04-22.
- Davis, A. (2011). "WATER QUALITY IMPROVEMENT USING RAIN GARDENS: UNIVERSITY OF MARYLAND STUDIES" (PDF).
TLDnR? Use curated referral citation links that Jane can refer to LATER. Or, she can forward that email to a contact she meets in the meeting.
Use a formal citation for the Davis paragraph? Why, we are making a claim!
On Wednesday, we will look at varations of the memo. And, talk about empty subjects in sentences and how to revise them away (craft lesson).
On Friday, you post the second draft for peer work.
Next week? Rain garden meme is due for a grade.
What topic is up next? Jane asks: what disposable coffee cup is best for the environment? Paper or styrofoam. The governor wants to know.
Marybeth Shea
Happy Wednesday, we are sliding down the hump toward Friday. See, weeks have a shape too. First up, two resources to prep for Friday's draft two party that follows the same pattern of draft 1.
Checklist! Note: you can ignore the anything marked in "purple" cells, as we have not spoken fully about these elements (thinking and craft) but will take them up next week.
Assignment sheet (assignment sheet basically summarizes everything we talked about in class; the checklist will help you the most, I believe.)
Cognitive strategy re Empty subjects discussion in class: We will visit Jenni Moy's blog to see her take on empty subjects and good examples. Now, shift to my four-page Google doc with science-focused examples.
Craft lesson: ...rain gardens that... or ...rain gardens, which.... (is a bit complicated but the punctuation is NOT. This little witch hat will help you remember that which takes a comma. Like 99% of the time.
That-which: which takes a comma; that does not! See this handout on choosing which and that.
Marybeth Shea
Happy Friday. I hope you enjoyed the sun and warmth yesterday. Here comes more cold. See you between 9-12 at same Google Meet. Remember that in the last ten minutes of each hour, I might be taking small dog out for a quick walk. Here she is in rain garden gear.
OK, here are some FAQs about your good questions concerning the two types of citation I have been teaching/requiring. Recall, though, that you will learn much between now and Monday by seeing your colleagues attempt this craft work in their writing. Then, by Monday, your questions will be even more precise and your confidence will be boosted. WE CAN DO THIS.
FAQs from students (really good questions!)-->
Can we use signal phrases and referral links in the evaluation paragraph or does it have to be APA in-text citations?
Use both. Why? You need the high ethos of the formal citation about the many articles available from Davis. Signal phrases help in all citation. Pick any one or two. One is sufficient.
So do we can use a referral link, too but in addition to the formal citation? YES. Here is why: We have a summary PDF of many Davis studies. We provide a helpful courtesy to link to this (Jane can read later). But, recall that when we make a claim (rain gardens are good) we need ethos from formal citation. Then, we are being courteous to our reader (save them clicks and searching) . Think of signal phrases and referral links in the professional memo as a “companion” to the formal citation just noted.
Can you give me more detail or even sample phrases for the evaluation paragraph? I am lost!
See the above e discussion, as I am trying to show how to deal with the fact that many appropriate/perfect/ authoritative sources are behind paywalls. I am showing you a way to do both. Sample you can imitate-->
Davis’ many peer reviewed articles (2017; 2019) attest to his long study of rain garden effectiveness. Open access resources that can help you include this UMD Rain Garden Guide as well as Blue Baltimore web exhibits on rain gardens. (Put links in AND use formal citation at end of memo).
Should we use referral links for all citations or do we use formal parenthetical citations in some cases? In other words do I do your "double" citation for the context/classifying para (P2) AND the illustrating/form function para (p3)
As I said, only the DAVIS work in the EVALUATION PARAGRAPH needs both formal and informal (referral linked). You are making a claim about science, which is why you need that formality and high ethos of information.
And, all paragraphs before the evaluation para are common knowledge. Yet, you are being courteous to refer Jane to knowledge that invented and arranged for her, to borrow Aristotle's five canons frame.
What sources should we use for the Davis paragraph? Can they be from papers his group has previously published or should we just stick with the slides on the website?
See above discussion and look at the links I posted earlier.
Should we have citations for our first small definition paragraph (pointy end of wedge)?
Technically, the other paragraphs besides the EVALUATION paragraph are common knowledge. You do not need sources to avoid a plagiarism charge. BUT, I want you to think about how referral sources and BOOKENDING are helpful for the reader. Being helpful to the reader is part of professionalism and advancing in the world.
Is this how to proceed in the context/classifying paragraph about the Who, Where, When detail in the classyfying para? (Look: a student sample!)
According to the Prince George’s County Department of the Environment (see page 4 of a 200+page PDF guide), Larry Coffman developed rain gardens …This first rain garden is in the Somerset neighborhood and still works well after installation in the early 1990s.
Do we need a references section?
The referral links are a citation move that stands on itself. HOWEVER, in science contexts we tend to use references to underscore the formality of peer reviewed research. Therefore, you place the formal Davis site in a bibliography at the end of the memo. Even the look of the bibligrraphic entry boosts your ethos. Recall that formal citation needs the parenthetical citation in the paragraph AND the bibliographic entry. EXAMPLE:
Nunc id neque eget urna pharetra rutrum. Rain gardens are effective. One of the earliest researchers of rain gardens as an environmental technique is Allen Davis, hydrologist and professor at UMD. Nulla a sapien a turpis consectetur maximus. Quisque sagittis ornare sapien, id consequat leo posuere dapibus. Phasellus pulvinar velit ac purus consectetur vulputate. Fusce ultricies ullamcorper felis, eu tristique dui. Integer at metus vitae nibh efficitur posuere non in ex. Nunc in lorem id lorem hendrerit dapibus nec in metus. Quisque venenatis sagittis dui, id ullamcorper augue accumsan accumsan. Curabitur sit amet velit rhoncus, euismod nibh ac, fermentum orci. His research is foundational to this engineering web exhibit based in part on his research. The supporting research by Davis is wide in scope. Two peer reviewed articles cited in this open access resource include (Davis et al, 2009) and (Davis et al, 2011) should give you confidence in the effectiveness of rain gardens.
Sample Sources
Davis, Allen P., Hunt, William F., Traver, Robert G., and Clar, Michael. (2009). Bioretention Technology: Overview of Current Practice and Future Needs. Journal of Environmental Engineering, 135(3), 109-117. doi: 10.1061/(asce)0733-9372(2009)135:3(109)
Davis, Allen P., Shokouhian, M., Sharma, H., and Minami, C. (2001). Laboratory study of biological retention for urban stormwater management. Water Environment Research, 73(1), 5-14. doi: 10.2175/106143001x138624
Student testimonial: Hey, Mb, I like the referral link and signal phrase craft. This works so well in a memo. I used this craft this week in my lab group. Thank you so much! Back to assignment 1: I actually used a signal phrase as well as a curated link for the Davis article (a 2003 one) but also included the parenthetical citation at the end if that’s okay? Y
Yes.
Week 4: Rain garden draft one due on Friday+peer editing Monday
First, here is the critical thinking strategy to teach a stressed, busy reader about a complex topic quickly (Jane is in this position). What is the cognitive wedge? Read this one page, illustrated Google Doc.
And for our first Eli Review task, we want to use this dummy text guide to show you want the cognitve wedge gives at the begining of a document.
Instructions to begin with Eli Review:
- Go to Eli Review.
- Did you view the video I suggested last week? View at least one now.
- Sign up for the course: Our Eli Review course code = direst591manias
- Pay! Use these two steps to save you money and get you through May
- Sign up for two week trial
- THEN, pay for the class at the 3 month rate.
The first task is due on Friday by 11:45 PM -- your calendar notes these due dates.
PREVIEW: We will talk about sources this week and next. However, generally in the memo you are dealing in common knowledge and do not need sources strictly. YET, you will use preview links, well curated next week.
On to a craft lesson: What is an appositive? A bit of information you insert in between the subject and the verb. You need commas or other sorts of punctuation to set this off. This image of bunny paws can help you remember to do this:
Let's review some sentence items -- with detail on appositive strategies -- from last week in this one page PDF on my Google Drive
Marybeth Shea
Hello to Wednesday: context paragraph. What is the JOB of the context paragraph? Several, actually. Try to answer:
- who? -- Larry Coffman, of PG County Department of Environmental Services (formerly)
- where? -- Prince George's County, first in Somerset area
- when? -- early 90s, meaning that the technology is mature and tested
- what/why? -- pioneered a low cost way to address the last mile problem of storm water management
- what is a last mile problem?
- storm water management to address storm event overflow with erosion (loss of soil) and sediment effluent into watershed
- now? We can absorb pollutants of several types, which raises your question of how. NOW, transition to the illustration paragraph, no. 3.
So, I told you to not worry about sources yet, though you may want to look at a few additional places. For example, you will feel confident about describing the illustration (form and function/above ground and below ground/biotic and abiotic) -- visit the Low Impact Development Center. In class, I will reveal insider knowledge about how/why this will be come an authoritative source for you next week.
Gif of the day:
Marybeth Shea
Happy dreary Friday, yet we have RAIN. MuHaHaHa. For our rain garden memo.
I will be around (same GoogleMeet all semester) per usual at
- 9
- 10
- 11
Between the n:50 to (n+1:00) time, I am possibly walking doggy in rain. Be patient as I will return.
As of this morning, I see 17 submissions by 49 people. This means that about 20 of you have yet to sign up for Eli Review. You must do this to be able to submit your draft. i implore you to submit something so that you can participated in the giving and receiving of feedback. Recall that you earn labor grades for showing up in this way.
If you do not post this assignment on time, you will be excluded from the peer revision work. That work is due Monday evening at 11:45. This means that you can do over the weekend if you like but you can wait to ask me questions in class on Monday. Again, respond to your colleagues by that deadline. PLEASE.
(I emphasize because students seem to not get this pattern!)
Grammar moment of the day -->> Alot v. A lot: the abomination of alot. alot is not a word. Let's see what this blogger says about remembering to use a lot and not alot(click into image to access her website).
Click into the above image to enjoy (Hyperboleandahalf) Allie Brosch's rant about a lot v. alot. Many images!
Now, to this bit of charm from N.N., a former student. Ta DAH! She made this in response to beer-can Alot.