Week 6: Coffee cup aka problem solution memo continues
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Check out your ELMS calendar for new dates on Eli Review, as we propel each other forward in this complex document.
We are still working off WEEK 5's guidance below, especially the flow chart (pale yellow-green large image). I have a few writing/thinking craft lessons:
- Focus on difference between description and analysis (key critical thinking skill) in this linked google doc (use the links, please)
- Metadiscourse (counting out is a metadiscourse strategy) and voice propel the complexity forward with flow (science examples in this short google doc)
- Empty subjects, in the four-page google doc
Marybeth Shea
Here is a dummy text exhibit in Google docs using lorum ipsum about the coffee cup memo pattern. Here are questions from last yea in an interactive google doc. Let's look at some and ANSWER YOUR QUESTIONS, too.
Marybeth Shea
Office Hours in the Sky /AMA doc by popular request. Thank D for this. I will host between 9-10 Friday night. BUT, we can keep this document open for questions until you turn in for a grade.
Friday! Here is your live Eli Review writing task of a first draft for peer collaboration. Be on time for each other tonight by 11:45. I want to open up the review task so you can complete by Sunday evening. We will have a second round of revision on this difficult assignment. However, working hard now is an investment in strengthening your writing.
Little craft lesson on dangling modifiers
Ok, now the grammar convention lesson of the day on dangling modifiers. This point reflects the wonder of our brains to figure out stuff and the limitations of language and YET, we can pay attention to these problems and revise them. Why? Because science wants to be precise and accurate and clear. Watch out! Opening clauses of sentences MUST MAKE SENSE with the subject. Consider the cognitive silliness of these examples:
Come on! Pianos DON'T WALK, ESPECIALLY ON STREETS.
TRY: While walking down the street, BUFFY was hit by a piano that fell from the third floor apartment at 314156 Pie Street.
Note: use the passive construction here, so that the opening clause FITS or MODIFIES the subject of the sentence. Writing requires a balance of principles. Don't apply the rules like a young lawyer on steroids.
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SECOND example: Using standard flu inoculation measures, infected hamsters developed pneumonia anyway. Hamsters wielding syringes? I don't think so.
THIRD example: Flushing the birds out, the hunter turned to thank his trusty dog. Dogs flush birds and other prey out of brush. Hunters and other people flush in delicate situations.
For fun, when pianos are murdered by pickle people.
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