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Being a chemist. Oops, science is POWERFUL!

ENGL 390, 390H, and (sometimes) 398V  Class Journal

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Week 8: coffee cup pattern+paragraph complexity+transitions

Paragraph guidance: Here are the MS Word two handouts (posted earlier but we did not disucss) that we use to think about paragraph elements.

Paragraph Definition: think Architectures

Paragraph Types (samples from the field, clipped, complete with some errors. Be careful about what you post on the web.)

One of Aristotle's canons for writing is ARRANGEMENT.  The order and "chunking" of information matters very much for reader cognition and receptivity to what you write. 

Now, how we use sources for this memo really matter: Review reading strategy resources, with a focus on description and analysis.

NEW:! Be aware of the difference between description work in writing and analysis work in writing (practice this in your reading, in all your classes).

Description/Analysis examples (in Google doc, with links. Please read links, too) 

My one-page adaptation (Google doc) of KE's reading strategies guide.

Check out Raul Pachego Vega’s excellent blog/website, with this set of resources for undergraduate students 

Reading strategies

Note taking strategies

 

 

 

 

Let's loop back to last week and pick up the pale green flow chart and look at the paragraph exhibit of going from meh to better, to better.

 

 

 

 

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Week 7: coffee cup memo begins

Rain garden memo due Wednesday 11:45 in Eli Review (week submission window for you).

Office Hours in the Sky/AMA Tuesday 8-9. UPDATED!

This NEW memo content is more complex and wide-ranging. Transitions are a way to thread the cognition for our busy readers. Your first memo focused on the definition stasis, with a evaluation move at the end.

Now, our wants a problem-solution memo about the type of coffee cup we use in our firm. Therefore, we need to frame this work with the stasis of policy (what ought we do).

Let's start by reading this short science news article from Science Daly.

Back to our boss: Jane wants a coffee cup policy for the office that is "green."  OK, that is the content for your invention.  Here is rough working arrangement (paragraphs):

POLITE OPENING, with your recommendation that previews your final policy paragraph

CONJECTURE PARAGRAPH  Problem description (our office situation, with quantifiers), with reference to national. international size of the problem

CONTEXT PARA(s) Environmental problems (energy efficiency ->climate change AND persistence of plastic in ocean -> food chain disruption)

YOUR WEIGHTED PROBLEM SOLVING METHOD (revealing your pre-analytical frame or bias)

DEFINITION-->CAUSE/EFFECT iinformation 

Coffee cup types (how many?  Can we do this in one paragraph or do we need one per coffee cup type? Use counting technique of two or three)

PIVOT PARA from background to ANALYSIS PARAS

Decision criteria (HINT:  Life cycle analysis, and define this; use an EPA source) HERE, this definition helps us move to the VALUE paragraphs

CAUSE/EFFECT continued (system) -->VALUE (Harm or benefit)

Martin Hocking's work on life cycle analysis of paper v. Styrofoam

Charles Moore's work on size of ocean garbage patches

POLICY/ RECOMMENDATION (restate your recommendation, with qualifiers, as one does in science land)

Science/Research support (remind about evidence discussed above in VALUING PARAGRAPHS)

Qualification (concede reasonableness of the other position)

Concrete examples (2)

Sentences that can help you as topic sentences or transitions sentences between paragraphs

Any analysis of coffee cup choice requires use of life cycle analysis.

Life cycle analysis -- also known as cradle-to-grave -- helps capture the entire environmental effect from origin and inputs through use and, importantly, to disposal.

In my analysis, I weight [name environmental problem] more heavily than [the other problem].

Life cycle analysis can help us understand this difficult question about coffee cup sustainability

We have two choices in coffee cups: paper or plastic (Styrofoam).

Martin Hocking conducted the first -- and to date only -- peer-reviewed analysis of the energy embodied in coffee cup choices.

Charles Moore is among the first to alert us to the huge problem of persistent ocean plastic.

We will work through the above over the next two weeks, using stasis theory.  

Lesson on paragraphs, here for early in your memo, in the definition/description move (STASIS 2) where we also need to address context.  Skill?:  Coherence in a paragraph (sample content but the paragraphs might not be complete for the purposes of your coffee cup paper):

"Meh" paragraph 

Plastic and paper cups pose problems for recycling. Ceramic cups are very energy intensive to produce. Recycling seems environmentally-sound.  Paper does not degrade deep within most landfills and the plastic coating is also difficult.  Not all plastic can be recycled.  You need to check the bottom of the container.  Landfills are increasingly full.  There is a huge "patch of garbage" in the Pacific Ocean. Supply chains of garbage recycling, especially plastic do not really work.  

Note: can you see the compare/contrast move here, even in this meh or necessary draft version?

Better paragraph

Paper and plastic both pose disposal problems.  First, not all plastic can be recycled. Check the bottom of the plastic container. "No. 1" and "No. 2" types can be recycled by most facilities. Second, paper does not degrade deep within most landfills because of low oxygen conditions. The plastic coating also interferes with decay. Landfills are increasingly full.  There are several huge "patches of garbage" in the Pacific Ocean. Recent analysis suggest that China is a source of this garbage.

Note: do you see a place for a referral citation, using the Seattle news article posted earlier? Can you find a more general article that you can refer to, about the limits of recycling and landfilling?  Recall that this iinformation, now, at this level of detail is common knowledge, even if you do know this.

Even better paragraph (can you see the re-thinking of content as well as sentence-level revision)

Paper and plastic both pose disposal problems.  First, not all plastic can be recycled. Check the bottom of the plastic container. "No. 1" and "No. 2" types can be recycled by most facilities. Second, paper does not degrade deep within most landfills because of low oxygen conditions. The plastic coating also interferes with decay. Landfills are increasingly full, with paper and plastic part of the waste stream. Not all plastic is recycled or landfilled. According to the Algalita Foundation,  huge "patches" of garbage in the Pacific Ocean are further evidence of of the environmental harm posed by plastic.

Notes: 1) is that referral link well curated? do you see another place for a referral citation?  Should we build a new paragraph with this iNY Times nformation or this 2022 Science Daly piece noted earlier.

 

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Week 6: rain garden memo refinement

Look for a second Friday-through-Monday Eli Review event of Writing Task, followed by Review Task. Here are the critical thinking skills and writing craft skills we focus on now:

  • Natural language sourcing for body paragraphs, including referral links
  • Critical analysis of web sources to work around pay wall for peer reviewed sources (Davis paragraph
    • Add a peer reviewed link in the sources/further reading (your choice
    • One quick link, well curated with Davis summary
  • What about:
    • Classifying (kitchen sink para) try the Low Impact Development Center
    • Illustrating paragraph, try the P.G. County Bioretention Manual (caution about the large PDF)
    • Preview functional definition that is your pointed edge of the cognitive wedge? None needed!

 Phrases for you?

the bioretention "bible" used since circa 2007 worldwide

remains the "grandfather" of low impact development and watershed hydrology

can gather more peer reviewed research if needed

did not want to send you to a pay wall

Option: switch classifying and illustrating paragraphs.

Let's note that in a tight, concrete topic, you do not need to over focus on transition between paragraphs because of the coherence of using the definition stasis within a cognitive wedge strategy.  Also helpful?  direct topic sentences.

Wednesday preview?  last thoughts on sourcing options and a checklist for this next review go-round. And, please skim through these padlet-hosted readngs about giving good feedback.

For analysis: several have asked me about using this Slide Share by A.D.  Let's use audience-context-purpose to assess.

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Week 5: canons, sentences, all in a concise rain garden mem

Looping back to pick up rhetorical language: Aristotle's canons of communication.  Here the links are from BYU's Silva Rhetoricae (Forest of Rhetoric) (Read if you wish but not required!)

Canons of Rhetoric
        Invention (thinking, brainstorming, pre-writing, investigating all arguments of logos, pathos, ethos)
        Arrangement (what order shall we use for this Audience, Context, Purpose)
        Style (word choice, level of complexity, warmth/coolness, authority of our ethos)
        Memory (are we imagining and adjusting our writing craft choices to the reader's needs, preferences)
        Delivery (what about practical elements of device, platform, timing)

We are focusing on the definition (stasis 2) of what a rain garden is.  Did you look at our background sources posted earlier?  Reposting here for your convenience:

  • Long EPA web exhibit with many links
  • PG County rain garden guide (9-page color PDF)
  • stasis theory and the rain garden memo (two-page Google doc)
  • Have you used Wikipedia to think about rain gardens?  You can use the journalism heuristic to select details that will help you write a memo (note: you are in the invention stage, here): Who what, where, when, and why -- journalism stasis questions

-- PREWRITING/DRAFTING

Who?  Larry Coffman, originator/environmental engineer; Allen Davis, hydrology researcher

What? classify rain gardens as low impact development; a last-mile solution for water quality protection

Where? Prince George's County in the Somerset Development

When? Early 1990s 

Why?  low cost storm water remediation and pollution control (two functions; two forms)

Audience, Context, Purpose: Audience scenario for this memo: Here is Jane, our boss. She asked for the memo at the end of our last staff meeting. 

 

Arrangement/Delivery: By the way, the OWL website at Purdue is a fabulous resource for writing. Memos also have a standard format:  See the image to the left.  Also, look at the email heading in your software.  This electronic message is based on the memo format.  

Bonus question: what is the difference between a memo and a letter?

Style/craft choice Topic Sentence: A list of qualities for you to strive for

  • Usually a short direct sentence (think announcement)
  • Signals the topic in the paragraph (think preview)
  • Hooks the reader by 1) raising a question or 2) provoking thought
  • Can be placed anywhere, but early on in the paragraph is the best default strategy for most professional documents; in other words, at the beginning of the paragraph
  • Contains an element of transition from the previous paragraph

Note:  topic sentences can be implied in tightly coherent prose (for now, leave this subtle technique to the professionals!)

Let's look at examples of topic sentences useful in the rain garden memo:

Rain gardens, or bioretention ponds, are a kind of low impact development.  Low impact development....

Rain gardens have two components:  layers of percolation material and carefully chosen plants.

Rain gardens protect the local environment by absorbing water run-off from impervious surfaces and by sequestering pollutants.

Dr. Allen Davis studies rain garden effectiveness.  Davis, a civil engineering professor, has been studying bioretention for more than twenty years.

Let's also think about sentences generally.  Take-away advice to you?  Write shorter sentences than those you are familiar with in literature and many of your textbooks. 

Now, let's think about sentences in these one-page MS Word handouts: 

Sentence Patterns (direct sentence is the stem pattern)

Buffy and Sentences

Pitch the Verb

Preview of Wednesday, on to paragraphs and the cognitive wedge (one-page Google doc with images):

Paragraph Definition: think  architectures (two-page MS Word handout)

Paragraph Types: think jobs (MS Word seven-page handout)

For Friday, you will make your first post in Eli Review on prewriting/drafting your rain garden memo. You need to sign up!

  1. Make an account in Eli Review where you sign up for our course, using wizard248earner to enroll.
  2. If you need a courtesy code, as we discussed in class, email with the email you will use in Eli Review and let me know on MONDAY.
QUESTION! Will the three month subscription work?  Mb will game this out and ask ER staff. To Be Determined (TBD).

By next Monday, you will give and receive feedback in Eli Review.  To be discussed AND I will place these tasks in the ELMS Calendar for your convenience.

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Week 4: canons of rhetoric+stasis theory

and a bit on directions knitting up from last week (in class).  Now, our last sets of rhetorical analysis terms for the special language of discourse analysis.

 "Branches" of Oratory (sometimes called "species")  For "oratory" think "discourse"
        Judicial (forensic, in some translations) see also the Wikipedia entry here
        Deliberative see also the Wikipedia entry here
        Epideictic  see also the Wikipedia entry here

From earlier in the course (sets 1 and 2), now new ways to look at the rhetorical triangles of earlier (logos-pathos-ethos + audience-context-purpose)

Slide  set 3: Booth's Two Triangles (OOPS! FIXED; TBD on Wednesday)

Slide set 5: Burke's Pentad on Audience or a Dramatatism Approach (OOPS! FIXED; TBD Wed.)

Link to modern tech: Triangles to Information Theory: Audience 

Back to classical rhetoric: Canons and stasis

Set 4 Canons and Writing Process

Scientific method has a cousin -- actually an ancestor -- in stasis theory.

More on stasis approaches:

Stasis and research (Owl Purdue web exhibit, by colleague A.B.)

BYU page on stasis approach (Web exhibit to see how legal process and jurisprudence knits forth)

UPDATED! Try this web exhibit from UTex that uses four-step stasis (from jurisprudence.  We in the sciences use five-step stasis because we elevate causal analysis

Stasis and dinosaur debate (download full text PDF and skim, if you care about dinosaurs or were once obsessed)

Question to ponder:  our first memo is an act of definition.  What is a rain garden?  What do you know now about rain gardens?

 

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